Unfortunately, the usual solution is to patch it with a
liberal coat of "script spackle": A scene which plugs the hole
using coincidence or fancy footwork on the part of the writer.
Instead of solving the story problem, they've covered the hole
and hope nobody notices. The writer tries to solve a script
problem by grafting something on, rather than going back to the
central concept of the script and solving the actual problem.
"Script spackle" covers the crack, but hasn't solved the
foundation problems. That crack is still there, under the
spackle. I've seen screenplays with more script spackle than
script! This is solving a problem from the outside in, instead
of from the inside out.
DON'T SAY A WORD is a script that seems to be mostly spackle.
It is based on a novel by Andrew Klavan, and I'm guessing that all of the problems come
from the novel's wacky plotting. Novels are a different animal than a screenplay. A
different experience for the audience. You may not noticed some strange plotting or
script spackle or inconsistency when you have a
big book that you read over a period of days, and may not remember the details
from one scene when reading another days later. Books are also usually told in *chapters*,
and read in chapters. So you are focused on what happens in *this chapter* and not as cognisant of the story as a whole.
But when you condense that book down to a 110
page script, all of the plotting flaws and script spackle become obvious. This
is why adapting a novel is often more difficult than writing an original
screenplay - the story that works good enough for the book may not work at all when
turned into a script. You often have to start from scratch with the concept and create
a version of the story that works on screen. You need to streamline the story and
remove pointless subplots and characters, focus on a central conflict, and remove
any structural or story problems.
That didn't seem to happen in DON'T SAY A WORD.
The story: Brittany Murphy knows a certain piece of information that mad-dog
killer Sean Bean wants to know. To escape from Bean, Brittany
goes crazy and cuts up her boyfriend so that she'll be committed
to the maximum security wing of New York's Hospital for the
criminally insane. No way Bean can get to her, there. So Bean
kidnaps psychiatrist Michael Douglas' daughter - the ransom: get
into the maximum security wing of the asylum and get the
information from Brittany by 5pm or they'll kill his
daughter.
Douglas breaks into fellow psychiatrist Oliver Platt's office,
reads his files on Brittany, then goes through all of those
locked doors to Brittany's cell then begins to "shrink against
time". He tries to break through to her - and get the information
Bean wants.
Bean hears every word said. He planted a bug in the maximum
security cell to make sure Douglas doesn't hold out on him.
It seems that Oliver Platt's girlfriend was kidnapped by Bean.
Platt planted the bug.
More script spackle! To plug this plot hole they have Platt
tell Douglas that he's the best shrink in New York earlier in the
film. See, Platt may be in charge of the hospital for the
criminally insane, but he's just not as good as Douglas in
dealing with the criminally insane. Why they would hire Platt
when he's incompetent is a plot hole that is never plugged.
They also never plug an obvious plot hole - if Bean controls
Platt, why not have Platt bring Brittany out of the safety of the
maximum security wing of the hospital? Later Douglas just walks
her out on a "field trip". Why didn't Bean just have Platt do the
same thing?
The way to solve a plot hole problem is NOT to go back and
plug it with script spackle, but to find the reason the plot hole
exists in the first place and solve that problem. Platt and
Douglas are almost the same character - having both of them in
the film is redundant. Instead why not just combine the
characters into one - Douglas. Now about that bug in Brittany's
room? Why not just get rid of it completely. It doesn't make any
sense. Problem solved! Find the ROOT of the problem and solve it,
don't try to cover up the problem with script spackle. The
problems always show through... and weaken your script. DON'T SAY
A WORD dissipates any power it might have by splitting the story
between Douglas and Platt and Jennifer Esposito - two of them
exist only to solve plot problems that should have been FIXED
instead of covered over.
Of course, nothing can explain why Bean would kill a dozen
people, kidnap a child, spend ten years in jail for murder, and
get stabbed and shot at... all for a jewel he'll end up fencing
for a tenth of it's value. Heck - he could have taken a day job
for those ten years he spent in slam and made more money!
Even though DON'T SAY A WORD began as a novel, and the plot holes and
script spackle may have come from the book and just not repaired when the
screenwriters adapted it, I have seen many original scripts with plenty of
script spackle covering the plot holes... and script spackle seems to be
a common suggestion in development meetings. If you find a plot hole in
your screenplay, going back and adding a line or scene to cover the hole is
*not* the solution. Instead you really need to solve the problem at its root, and that
may require a major rewrite. Yes, that is a lot of work. Yes, that requires some
analytical skills on your part. Yes, screenwriting is often about solving problems. Just hiding
the problems never works! All of those problems you thought you covered up, show on screen!
Don't patch your story with script spackle, *repair* the story by finding the root problem and fixing that.
FIND A GREAT IDEA!
*** YOUR IDEA MACHINE ***
Expanded version with more ways to find great ideas! Your screenplay is going to begin with an idea. There are good ideas and bad ideas and commercial ideas and personal ideas. But where do you find ideas in the first place? This handbook explores different methods for finding or generating ideas, and combining those ideas into concepts that sell. The Idea Bank, Fifteen Places To Find Ideas, Good Ideas And Bad Ideas, Ideas From Locations And Elements, Keeping Track Of Your Ideas, Idea Theft - What Can You Do? Weird Ways To Connect Ideas, Combing Ideas To Create Concepts, High Concepts - What Are They? Creating The Killer Concept, Substitution - Lion Tamers & Hitmen, Creating Blockbuster Concepts, Magnification And The Matrix, Conflict Within Concept, Concepts With Visual Conflict, Avoiding Episodic Concepts, much more! Print version is 48 pages, Kindle version is over 175 pages!
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FIGURE OUT YOUR STORY!
*** OUTLINES & THE THEMATIC ***
Your story is like a road trip... but where are you going? What's the best route to get there? What are the best sights to see along the way? Just as you plan a vacation instead of just jump in the car and start driving, it's a good idea to plan your story. An artist does sketches before breaking out the oils, so why shouldn't a writer do the same? This Blue Book looks at various outlining methods used by professional screenwriters like Wesley Strick, Paul Schrader, John August, and others... as well as a guest chapter on novel outlines. Plus a whole section on the Thematic Method of generating scenes and characters and other elements that will be part of your outline. The three stages of writing are: Pre-writing, Writing, and Rewriting... this book looks at that first stage and how to use it to improve your screenplays and novels.
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GOT STRUCTURE?!
*** STRUCTURING YOUR STORY ***
William Goldman says the most important single element of any screenplay is structure. It’s the skeleton under the flesh and blood of your story. Without it, you have a spineless, formless, mess... a slug! How do you make sure your structure is strong enough to support your story? How do you prevent your story from becoming a slug? This Blue Book explores different types of popular structures from the basic three act structure to more obscure methods like leap-frogging. We also look at structure as a verb as well as a noun, and techniques for structuring your story for maximum emotional impact. Most of the other books just look at *structure* and ignore the art of *structuring* your story. Techniques to make your story a page turner... instead of a slug!
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STORY: WELL TOLD!
*** STORY: WELL TOLD ***
This book takes you step-by-step through the construction of a story... and how to tell a story well, why Story always starts with character... but ISN'T character, Breaking Your Story, Irony, Planting Information, Evolving Story, Leaving No Dramatic Stone Unturned, The Three Greek Unities, The Importance Of Stakes, The Thematic Method, and how to create personal stories with blockbuster potential. Ready to tell a story?
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HOW DO I DO THAT?
*** 101 SCREENWRITING ANSWERS ***
New to screenwriting? You probably have questions! How do I get an Agent? How do I write a phone conversation?
Do I need a Mentor? What’s does VO and OC and OS mean? What is proper screenplay format?
Should I use a pen name? Do I need to movie to Hollywood? What’s the difference between a
Producer and a Production Manager, and which should I sell my script to? How do I write a Text Message?
Should I Copyright or WGA register my script? Can I Direct or Star? How do I write an Improvised scene?
Overcoming Writer’s Block? How do I write a Sex Scene? And many many more! This book has the answers to
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START STRONG!
*** HOOK 'EM IN TEN ***
Your story doesn't get a second chance to make a great first impression, and this book shows you a
bunch of techniques on how to do that. From the 12 Basic Ways To Begin Your Story, to the 3 Stars Of
Your First Scene (at least one must be present) to World Building, Title Crawls, Backstory, Starting
Late, Teasers and Pre Title Sequences, Establishing Theme & Motifs (using GODFATHER PART 2), Five Critical
Elements, Setting Up The Rest Of The Story (with GODFATHER), and much more! With hundreds of examples
ranging from Oscar winners to classic films like CASABLANCA to some of my produced films (because
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MOVIES ARE CHARACTERS!
*** CREATING STRONG PROTAGONISTS ***
Expanded version with more ways to create interesting protagonists! A step-by-step guide to creating "take charge" protagonists. Screenplays are about characters in conflict... characters in emotional turmoil... Strong three dimensional protagonists who can find solutions to their problems in 110 pages. But how do you create characters like this? How do you turn words into flesh and blood? Character issues, Knowing Who Is The Boss, Tapping into YOUR fears, The Naked Character, Pulp Friction, Man With A Plan, Character Arcs, Avoiding Cliche People, Deep Characterization, Problem Protagonists, 12 Ways To Create Likable Protagonists (even if they are criminals), Active vs. Reactive, The Third Dimension In Character, Relationships, Ensemble Scripts, and much, much more. Print version is 48 pages, Kindle version is once again around 205 pages!
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I WRITE PICTURES!
*** VISUAL STORYTELLING *** - For Kindle! (exclusive)
Show Don't Tell - but *how* do you do that? Here are techniques to tell stories visually! Using Oscar Winning Films and Oscar Nominated Films as our primary examples: from the first Best Picture Winner "Sunrise" (1927) to the Oscar Nominated "The Artist" (which takes place in 1927) with stops along the way Pixar's "Up" and Best Original Screenplay Winner "Breaking Away" (a small indie style drama - told visually) as well as "Witness" and other Oscar Winners as examples... plus RISE OF THE PLANET OF THE APES. Print version is 48 pages, Kindle version is over 200 pages!
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*** DESCRIPTION & VOICE ***
IS HALF OF YOUR STORY IN TROUBLE?
Most screenplays are about a 50/50 split between dialogue and description - which means your description is just as important as your dialogue. It just gets less press because the audience never sees it, the same reason why screenwriters get less press than movie stars. But your story will never get to the audience until readers and development executives read your script... so it is a very important factor. Until the movie is made the screenplay is the movie and must be just as exciting as the movie. So how do you make your screenplay exciting to read? Description is important in a novel as well, and the “audience” does read it... how do we write riveting description?
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PRO DIALOGUE TECHNIQUES!
*** DIALOGUE SECRETS ***
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WHAT IS A SCENE?
*** SCENE SECRETS ***
What is a scene and how many you will need? The difference between scenes and sluglines. Put your scenes on trial for their lives! Using "Jaws" we'll look at beats within a scene. Scene DNA. Creating set pieces and high concept scenes. A famous director talks about creating memorable scenes. 12 ways to create new scenes. Creating unexpected scenes. Use dramatic tension to supercharge your scenes. Plants and payoffs in scenes. Plus transitions and buttons and the all important "flow"... and more! Over 65,000 words! Print version was 48 pages, Kindle version is around 210 pages!
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SUBPLOTS?
*** SUPPORTING CHARACTER SECRETS ***
Expanded version with more techniques to flesh out your Supporting Characters and make them individuals. Using the hit movie BRIDESMAIDS as well as other comedies like THE HANGOVER and TED and HIGH FIDELITY and
40 YEAR OLD VIRGIN and many other examples we look at ways to make your Supporting Characters come alive on the page.
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ACT TWO SOLUTIONS!
*** ACT TWO SECRETS ***
Expanded version with more techniques to help you through the desert of Act Two! Subjects Include: What Is Act Two? Inside Moves, The 2 Ps: Purpose & Pacing, The 4Ds: Dilemma, Denial, Drama and Decision, Momentum, the Two Act Twos, Subplot Prisms, Deadlines, Drive, Levels Of Conflict, Escalation, When Act Two Begins and When Act Two Ends, Scene Order, Bite Sized Pieces, Common Act Two Issues, Plot Devices For Act Two, and dozens of others. Over 67,000 words (that’s well over 200 pages) of tools and techniques to get you through the desert of Act Two alive!
Print version was 48 pages, Kindle version is well over 200 pages!
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Can You Make It bigger?
***BLOCKBUSTERS (and BEACH READS) ***
Thinking about writing a big Disaster Movie? An Historical Epic? An Epic Adventure Film? Or maybe you like Gladiator Movies? This book looks at writing Blockbusters and those Big Fat Beach Read novels - anything epic! Usng movies like JAWS, POSEIDON ADVENTURE, LAWRENCE OF ARABIA, THE GUNS OF NAVARONE, and those MARVEL and FAST & FURIOUS flicks as examples. What *is* a Blockbuster? 107 years of Blockbuster history! Blockbuster Characters. Blockbuster Story Types! Why modern Blockbusters are soap operas! Social Issues in Blcokbusters? Big Emotions! Keeping All Of Those Characters Distinctive! How to avoid the Big problems found in Big Movies and books! More! If you are writing a Big Event Movie or a Big Fat Novel, there are tips and techniques to help you!
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All About Rewrites!
*** REWRITES Blue Book! ***
When You Finish Your Screenplay Or Novel...
The Rewrites Begin!
The end is just the beginning! You’ve finished your story, but now the rewriting begins! This 405 page book
shows you how to rewrite your screenplay or novel to perfection. Everything from Character Consistency to
Shoeboxing to How To Give And Receive Notes to 15 Solutions If Your Script’s Too Long! and 15 Solutions
If Your Script’s Too Short! to Finding The Cause Of A Story Problem to Good Notes Vs. Bad Notes to Finding
Beta Readers to Avoiding Predictability to Learning To Be Objective About Your Work to Script Killer Notes and
Notes From Idiots to Production Rewrites and What The Page Colors Mean? and a Complete Rewrite Checklist!
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Want To Look Like An Expert?
*** RESEARCH & WORLD BUILDING BUILDING! ***
Using movie examples like TOP GUN, HUNT FOR RED OCTOBER, BLUE CRUSH, ADVENTURE LAND, several of my produced films,
JOHN WICK, the novels of Donald E. Westlake and Thomas B. Dewey, SPY KIDS, the LORD OF THE RINGS movies, SOYLENT GREEN
(which takes place in the far off future of 2022), and many others we will look at researching stories and creating worlds.
The 8 Types Of Research, the 10 Types Of Information To Look For, 12 Important Elements Of World Building. Plus chapters on How
To Rob A Bank and Commit Murder And Get Away With It for those of you interested in crime fiction, and Researching The Future
for those writing science fiction, and Levels Of Reality if you are writing about a version of the real world.
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All About LOGLINES, TREATMENTS, and PITCHING!
*** LOGLINES, TREATMENTS, and PITCHING! ***
You have written a brilliant 110 page screenplay, but how do you get anyone to read it? You need to distill
it down into some form of verbal moonshine or story rocket fuel that will ignite that bored development executive
or manager or agent and get them to request your screenplay. But how do you shrink those 110 pages into a 25
word logline or a 2 minute elevator pitch or a one page synopsis or a short paragraph? This 100,000 word book
shows you how! Everything you need to know! From common logline mistakes (and how to solve them) to how
your pitch can reveal story problems to the 4 types of pitches!
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READY TO BREAK IN?
*** BREAKING IN BLUE BOOK ***
Should really be called the BUSINESS BLUE BOOK because it covers almost everything you will need to
know for your screenwriting career: from thinking like a producer and learning to speak their language,
to query letters and finding a manager or agent, to making connections (at home and in Hollywood) and
networking, to the different kinds of meetings you are will have at Studios, to the difference between
a producer and a studio, to landing an assignment at that meeting and what is required of you when you
are working under contract, to contracts and options and lawyers and... when to run from a deal!
Information you can use *now* to move your career forward! It's all here in the Biggest Blue Book yet!
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