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COACH CARTER is the true story of Ken Carter who took a job as basketball coach at Richmond High School in my home county of Contra Costa, California. Sure, the film is filled with those big speeches we expect to see in films like this; but the film is not the cliche sports movie that's all about winning the big game, it's all about getting the team members grades up so that they can get into college. Carter made his team sign contracts that they would keep a 2.3 grade average in order to play on the team, and when some of his team members got failing grades... he locked the gym doors and forfeited games until the kids got better grades. A basketball movie that's not about basketball games? Where you cheer at some kid passing his Algebra test? That's not the only thing that's different about the film. It manages to take characters we've seen a million times before and turn them from tired cliches into three dimensional characters that we really care about. Even one character's mother - who may be in the film a total of a couple of minutes - comes across as fully fleshed out three dimensional person, rather than a cliche. How do they do that? How do *we* do that?

Well, it's kind of obvious. The way to create non-cliche characters is to give them more than one dimension. To give them good sides and bad sides... so that they have insides (and aren't just cardboard cut outs). A cliche is when all the audience can see is the surface of the character, and that surface is one-dimensional. We want to bust cliches by digging beneath the surface and showing the motivations that create the actions. We don't just want to see one side of a character, we want to see both sides *plus* the motivations underneath.

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COACH CARTER uses symbolic antagonists (there's a chapter on this in the SUPPORTING CHARACTERS Blue Book) to show the social problems facing the students on the team, so cute little Ashanti gets to play a "villain" - one of the player's girlfriends who gets pregnant, forcing him to decide between being a teen father or dumping the woman he loves to go to college. We also see Ashanti's side of the conflict - she can keep the baby and keep her man from leaving her, right? Without her man, what else does she have? She lives with her mom and sister and all of her sister's kids, and marrying the man she loves would at least get her out of her mother's house.

What could have been a cliche "girl who gets knocked up to keep her man" subplot turns into a real situation where no one is a real villain - everyone is just trying to get what they need to survive. Because the story is about the team, anything that hurts the team is the antagonist... and that makes Ashanti a "symbolic villain". She represents teen pregnancy... but her character is still three dimensional and completely understandable. Just because she's symbolic doesn't means she's a cliche.

But the best "symbolic villain" in the film is one of the players, Cruz. What makes him a great character, and what makes COACH CARTER a good film, is that Cruz is not a one dimensional cliche - we see several sides of him. When we first see Cruz he's fighting with team members in the locker room. He's a little guy, but has the power (and passion) of a kid twice his size. The second time we see him, he's picking a fight with Coach Carter in the gym - he tries to sucker punch him. Carter knows it's coming, grab Cruz's fist and twists his arm behind his back - slamming Cruz against the gym wall. When Cruz complains that teachers aren't supposed to hurt students, Carter tells him he's not a teacher, he's the basketball coach... then forces him out of the gym and off the team. Cruz is a bundle of rage that can not be controlled... he can't even control himself.

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He may be off the team, but he's not out of the story. A few scenes later he sees some team members talking and goes over to tease them about going along with Carter's necktie requirement. The team is talking team stuff... and Cruz feels left out. Later he pulls a gun on a couple of team members, threatening them... as a joke. They don't think it's funny. It's obvious to us that Cruz is doing all of this because he misses being part of the team - but the results are alienating the team members even more. We next see Cruz dealing drugs for his cousin, a local gangster. This is Cruz's real life - his future. He will be a drug dealer and gang-banger and probably die young. That could easily have been a cliched character, but Cruz isn't ONLY a drug dealer in this script.

When he sees some team members living a *different* life after a game, a life that he wants for himself, he pleads with Coach Carter to play on the team. Carter gives him an impossible task - to do all of the push ups and running exercises that he has missed so far... in one week. There's a moment where Cruz almost walks away... but then he starts doing push ups. In a great sequence, he gets back onto the team. He's a great player. The team provides him with a potential future that is much better than dealing drugs for his cousin. But when it comes to Carter's attention that many team members are cutting classes and getting failing grades, he tells the team they have to study in order to play...and Cruz's temper flares up again. He's not in school to study, he's only here for basketball. He quits the team and walks away.

What happens before Cruz walks out on the team is some clever writing. The team is undefeated, and the local papers are covering every game. One of the kids is reading the paper out loud, and when it comes to a passage praising another team member, hands him the paper to read... only he *can't* read. He stumbles over words. And this is a team member that spends *more* time in class than Cruz does. The other student's reading problems are *symbolic* of Cruz's problems (and the team's problems). Having Cruz read that passage and stumble would have been the obvious (and cliche) way to handle the scene, but by giving the problem to another character in the same boat as Cruz, the scene becomes more subtle. We (the audience) connect the dots. We know that Cruz walks out because he is unable to fulfill the academic requirements of high school... all he has is basketball. Again - he's not just some gang-banger kid from the inner city, he has a dream... but one he can't attain. This makes him a tragic villain.

But even the second time Cruz leaves the gym isn't the last time he's seen in the story. Because Cruz is still a key player on the team... even though he's no longer on the team. Cruz sinks back into full time drug dealing for his cousin, hitting rock bottom.


TWO SIDES... THREE SIDES...

Now we come to the greatest scene in the Cruz subplot: A group of team members are downtown, in the bad part of town (not Richmond's Hilltop Mall). When Cruz and his cousin pull up across the street to do some drug business. Cruz sees his former team members across the street... and makes one of those great decisions that we can see. He tells his cousin that he'll be with him in a minute, he wants to say hello to his team mates... then he *crosses the street* (a physical action). On his way across the street, he sees a group of gang members approach his team mates and threaten them. Cruz runs across the street, brandishes his gun, and chases off the gang members.

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Look at what has happens in this scene: Cruz has brought his violent world (the gun) into the team's world. Is he a team member or a gangster? A basketball player or a drug dealer? A loyal friend or a thug? When the "two Cruzes" intersect in this scene, we can see both sides of him at the same time. We can see the conflict raging inside of him through external actions. His character is showing. The contradictions within the character are all on display, here. But the scene isn't over, yet.

Across the street, his cousin is shot in a drug deal gone bad. Cruz races across the street, and instead of going after his cousin's killer with that gun he was brandishing a few minutes earlier... he cradles his dying cousin in his arms. The cliche would have been more violence. The cliche character would have been driven by violence. But this scene shows what drives Cruz - belonging to a group. Let's call that "family". When he couldn't belong to the family of the basketball team, he went back to the family of drug dealers. He's tough guy that needs to be loved - needs to feel needed - needs to belong. After his cousin is killed, Cruz breaks down and exposes all of this to Coach Carter. He shows his vulnerability, shows his needs, shows that he's not just that guy who will fight at the drop of a hat. He shows the *reason* why he fights everyone. He needs to be loved.

Is that the cliche inner city gang-banger? A vulnerable guy who needs to be loved? Who needs to belong? Who is brandishing a weapon one minute and crying the next?

Let's look at that from the other side: Is that a cliche high school basketball player? A vulnerable guy who needs to be loved? Needs to belong? See - it's not a cliche no matter how you look at it. This is a three-dimensional human character. There is a root motivation for both playing on the team and being part of the drug dealing gang.

Every hero is a villain, every villain is a hero. It's all a matter of point of view.


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Take each of your characters, even the villains, and find ways to show them as complex individuals rather than cliches. With your protagonist, you will probably know them from the inside out - you'll know their motivations before you place them in a story. For supporting characters like Cruz you may only know how they fit into the story, and you'll have to work from the outside in. Look at their characteristics and figure out what motivation connects all of the facets of their character. Member of the team, member of the gang... hmm, I see a pattern. What would cause this pattern in a person? What drives someone to want to be a part of a group?

Make sure your characters, even the minor ones, have more than one side to them, and that there's a deeper motivation at their core. A cliche character is one that is all surface - all good or bad. We want characters in our screenplays that are real people. Believable. That makes our stories more believable.

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